Annabella Nyx Adhish « Thread Started on Nov 1, 2009, 10:37am »
Name: Annabella Nyx Adhish Nickname: Nyx Sex: Female Hair color: white blonde Eye color: Aqua blue when blood thirst it nomal, solid black when in desperate need of blood. height/weight: 5 foot 3 inches // 111 pounds Weapon: Seduction, claws, two handed scimitar Powers: powers over natural elements... wind, rain, ect..., Transformation, Hypnosis Animal: white wolf Breed: Numarai - They are known as the flirtatious ones of all vampire breeds, which makes them experienced hunters. They mostly hunt for beautiful women and attractive young men. They are spunky and sassy, and have a knack for staying up late in the night hours, only to be yelled at by the Clammoret member of the pack. Being that they are the ‘party animal' of sorts, they tend to get out of control, but are reliable when other pack Citizens need a feed quickly. Although they are slightly careless, they are also very conscientious, and their sharp night vision can prove to be very helpful. Numarai can eat regular human food, but garlic can prove to be deadly if taken in huge dosages. They can also extend their nails to deadly, razor sharp nails much like the Ejousan. The only difference is that the Numarai possess poison in their nails that can stun a vampire for a short length of time and can kill a human with an instant prick. Personality: Evil History: Nyx was born a full blooded Vampire. She can not remember what happened about 300 years ago after a near to death fight that she had conjured herself into. Though, Nyx is a young female vampire with manners and ambition. She lives by herself in a large manor, she has human as her blood slaves so that she can have a tasty dinner whenever she needs it. She keeps the people alive just to take their blood. All of the woman slaves are virgins and then means their blood is better than average plus it's clean.
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Re: Annabella Nyx Adhish « Reply #1 on Nov 1, 2009, 2:54pm »
story and all is good however please tone down your powers your allowed 3 which you have but you've also added in a death touch. And if your going to have an auto-kill power keep in mind that those kind of powers when used during an RP can sort of crumble the storyline (i.e. after fight through countless villains we make it to the leader who's human while hes ranting about his plan you poke him and he dies) it just sort of takes away from the story I find.
If you could just pick 3 of the powers you mentioned then well be good to go.
I.E.
Poison Nails - Short stun to supernatural creatures/Knocks humans unconscious for a period of time reflected by there constitution. Transformation - Can shape shift to alter appearance. Power of Wind - Can control and bend air to make small whirlwinds or other winds.
And obviously you'll still have the usual vampire powers like super strength/speed/senses etc. and all the weaknesses that come with them.